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When was the last time
You heard the word 'erection' in poetry?
I think it was a while back
Between the pages
Of reform
And Odyssey.

I mean "humans" don't even play
Bogies anymore,
Or just rise to the thirteen year old tree-house
Inside us all
Where politeness is a foul facade
And we aren't afraid of our fingers.

No...
Instead
We prioritise the silhouettes
And forget
The way pressing pen into paper
Made us so
Steamy
And out of
Breath.

Inspiration isn't a pretty, pristine river...
It's magma
Flowing
With taboo,
Glowing
Like irradiated
Lemonade
And it's about time we became
Mutants too.

It's about time
We let up
And let it
Burn us up
Turn us on
Turn us up
And fine-tune
Our wobbly bits
Into an aphrodisiac
Viagra fusion
Of concussive
Corrosive
Verbose
Sex.

So if there's any P.S.
Poetry can teach you
It's this.

Never forget
the word 'erection'.
I had no idea how unfinished this was when I first posted it, but I think I've written it the way it deserved to be written.

Enjoy.

And remember the word.

EDIT
Sorry I reuploaded it for those who had read and commented. The computer had a moment of crazy. It is practically a brand new piece though so...:shrug:

EDIT EDIT
Wow...thank you for the DD. I've just literally had to walk around my house from the shock of it, but I'm being melodramatic and I'm calm now so...yes...thank you :)
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Given 2012-08-05
The nature of inspiration by ~Adonael ( Suggested by my-soul-is-mine and Featured by thorns )
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BatmanWithBunnyEars Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013   General Artist
:iconcongratsddplz: I like the free-form jazzy rhythm of the piece, how it speeds up in the middle and slows down just at the end for emphasis.
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Adonael Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. I knew I'd done something right when I found myself remembering it word for word without the need for paper.
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Lottie-Girl Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Student General Artist
I think you may have told me about your DD, though I'm not too sure, old age and all that jazz makes me forgetful. So Congrats!! :D

I love this. It reminds me of all the lecture I've been having on authenticity and it's significance.

Well written and powerful.

:D
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Adonael Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I may have showed off about it at some point ;)

I'm very humbled that it reminded you of such a lecture - makes me feel like I've found my style with a poem like this one, you know?? :3

Thank you :iconsuperheroglompplz:
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Lottie-Girl Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Student General Artist
You're very welcome :D
And I'm glad :D
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Niky28 Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
wow :D congrats for the DD :D
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Adonael Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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Niky28 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
you're welcome! ^^
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ShadowPhoenix-916 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Your PS was awesome! Away with flowery words; sometimes its what's real and raw and dirty that's beautiful
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Adonael Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's exactly what I was going for - sometimes we have to be brave and ambitious - even more so than this poem actually.

And thank you. I appreciate the comment :)
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